This blog is for INDA students investigating the relationships between beliefs and buildings. This will be the digital venue for posting student work, commentary among students, and critiques.
Thursday, November 10, 2011
Bung's pin-up 2
The last plate shows that if people respect the tree spirit, they will get merited, while if they disrespect they will get punished.
I agree with the first comment. Your 3rd plate is still too text heavy; it should be more graphic. Also, you should not use the precious, cute looking tree you chose for the background. Maybe you can even use the format of the tree as the organizing device for your argument. Using trunk, branches, leaves, roots as a way of organizing the information about the trees you are using. But, make your own tree or find a good autocad or illustrator line tree that you can use instead.
also, your tree site plan is very much improved. I would like to see your revised page that shows the different types of trees and the spirits associated with those trees, as well as the spirits associated with different types of cut wood.
Finally, you last page, though graphically quite clear, does not communicate your story adequately. Do not be afraid of adding a word next to your icons saying "respect," "disrespect" etc, to help us understand what you are depicting.
Please be prepared tomorrow to show a model of your concept, to describe the program, and to specify the size and exact location of your intervention on the Rugby field (it should not get in the way of Rugby, for instance.
I think you can try to use symbol like your4th&5th plate in your 3th plate as it would help us to understand the story in a few seconds.
ReplyDeleteoh nice suggestion! thanks will :D
ReplyDeleteI agree with the first comment. Your 3rd plate is still too text heavy; it should be more graphic. Also, you should not use the precious, cute looking tree you chose for the background. Maybe you can even use the format of the tree as the organizing device for your argument. Using trunk, branches, leaves, roots as a way of organizing the information about the trees you are using. But, make your own tree or find a good autocad or illustrator line tree that you can use instead.
ReplyDeletealso, your tree site plan is very much improved. I would like to see your revised page that shows the different types of trees and the spirits associated with those trees, as well as the spirits associated with different types of cut wood.
ReplyDeleteFinally, you last page, though graphically quite clear, does not communicate your story adequately. Do not be afraid of adding a word next to your icons saying "respect," "disrespect" etc, to help us understand what you are depicting.
Please be prepared tomorrow to show a model of your concept, to describe the program, and to specify the size and exact location of your intervention on the Rugby field (it should not get in the way of Rugby, for instance.